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Utopia
they called it
more of a dystopia

we were stumbling
waiting for an
oasis mirage, a salvation

questioning our existence

questioning the future
formation of helium
and hydrogen as we
lay transfixed at what
may
lay beyond

Then

one eternity later

one unfathomable

indefinable

moment later
we were nothing more
than blasted bits
forsaken fossils
of moronic bliss

volatile
rag
dolls

centuries later
life still leaked from our pores
we slipped into dream cast eyes
reduced to fibrous beings
believe, we sighed in the breeze

incredulously...our words cluttered
the spaces of electrons!

That was the time
our dead remote
minds
still dreamed of
awakening
when our planet
still had hope

Now it is the temporal length of event
when the nuclear cloud
when the harsh mess
of skin, tissue, bone and decay
radiates to the injured hearts
and diseases them
in ways the world
could have somehow
maybe
turned away

eleventh hour gone
we told you what

is

coming

we told you to believe

Can you recognise the apocalypse?
No,
not the end of the world.

The uncovering.
nos·trum
/ˈnästrəm/

Noun

A medicine, esp. an ineffective one, prepared by an unqualified person.
A pet scheme, esp. one for bringing about some social or political reform or improvement.

Synonyms
panacea - cure-all

Must have read/seen something before I fell asleep and forgot, because I was having some weird dreams, and then I came up with this XD
Yay :D

EDIT:Since people have been thinking about the story behind this, here goes:

There is-a sci fi theme of there having been some sort of race before the creation of the earth and sun etc-then the big bang, referenced by the 'blasted bits' paragraph, and because of this they were destroyed and reduced to little bits that fly around, and they have 'the knowledge' as all ancients do, they try to explain this but of course they are shown the ignorance of human kind 'our words cluttered the spaces of electrons' and then it is too late, and as the apocalypse is nigh, they tell them that you imagined the destruction of the world, it is basically the uncovering of a great secret that will change the world (because that is what apocalypse really means, uncovering of knowledge, however the destruction idea was taken from biblical ideas).

I would have made it into an actual story, cause I love the idea and I love writing, but I always give up on my stories and I felt I would write it better so to speak in poetry form ^^
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Jco1205 Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
 This is so great. The flow of it makes me feel like it's being read to me in such a powerful and meaningful voice. A definite fav.
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ThePixiesMuse Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thaaaaaaank youuu verrrrryyyy much :D Glad you liked it m'love ^^
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xfoxfirex Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very beautiful. You have a way with words. Like there is some great story behind this.
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ThePixiesMuse Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much, that means a lot! If you want the story, scroll down a bit in the comments to an extremely long paragraph of mine XD Maybe I should post it in the description... ^^
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Dejers Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, seems like it has a story behind it, or something that should be alongside it.
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ThePixiesMuse Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, I did leave that up to everyone to decide for themselves, but yes, there is-a sci fi theme of there having been some sort of race before the creation of the earth and sun etc-then the big bang, referenced by the 'blasted bits' paragraph, and because of this they were destroyed and reduced to little bits that fly around, and they have 'the knowledge' as all ancients do, they try to explain this but of course they are shown the ignorance of human kind 'our words cluttered the spaces of electrons' and then it is too late, and as the apocalypse is nigh, they tell them that you imagined the destruction of the world, it is basically the uncovering of a great secret that will change the world (because that is what apocalypse really means, uncovering of knowledge, however the destruction idea was taken from biblical ideas).

Sorry, I rambled on a bit there XD
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Enemom Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The flow of this poem is beautifully executed, as well as the idea. Strips down that one word to the bare bone, leaving nothing but what it truly is. Beautiful. 
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ThePixiesMuse Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are so kind ^^
As I hoped it would, thank you very much :D x
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ThePixiesMuse Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Btw...I love creepypasta tooooooo so so much xDD :3
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Littlefox911 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Student Writer
Amazing word choice. Created a sense of unease which forced my eyes to continue moving down the page.
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ThePixiesMuse Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! So happy it had that effect on you, it always makes me smile when people are intrigued by what I write ^^
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EpickBlonde666 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful word usage :D

No, but really, it's beautiful. (:
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ThePixiesMuse Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! I am glad you liked it :happybounce:
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EpickBlonde666 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are so very welcome! (:
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StanzaMan Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013
Really shows the fragility of life, the Romans thought their empire would last forever, the British empire said the sun would never set on it, and now we have bombs which can destroy cities in seconds. What will happen next, who knows?
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ThePixiesMuse Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Agreed! I love your reference to empires ^_^ I just literally made up an alien race before the solar system was made, and their souls started warning people of future disasters and that there is more to life than you believe, but no one listens (cause yunno, supernatural preachers?) and now...something unknown will happen :D Thank you so much for your thoughts! 
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Vildarra Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this and I have no real idea why. I think it might be because of the imagery and flow of the poem.
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ThePixiesMuse Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! ^^ I am soo happy I made you feel this way, I feel that when you read a poem, and you like it but, you just don't know what does it, it makes the poem unique ^^
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EddieVancil Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013
Your mind is a very interesting place and I'm glad you let us all in.
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ThePixiesMuse Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:happybounce: Thank you so much! ^^ 
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shesellsseashells1 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is just amazing
The layout, the words, the way you describe things
I am in awe
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ThePixiesMuse Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
^^ awwwww thank you, you just made my day :happybounce:
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shesellsseashells1 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome!!
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FlinchSaint Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Gotta say, this took my breath away. Very evocative and such amazing turns of phrase.
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ThePixiesMuse Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! :happybounce: So happy it has that effect ^^
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